Talk:Megan Lakkides

Megan, good post overall. The opening flowed well into the rest of your sections and the layout of your post is neat and structured well. Also, I think you did a good job with keeping your segments in small and easily readable chunks. Finally, your post had a smooth, non-abrupt conclusion. For improvements, I feel that most of what could be done to improve your post is in the organization of the content. To start, I thought that the theme that you chose was not quite woven in enough into your other content; its introduction seemed a bit sudden. I also felt as though, while you chose to share quite a bit about your identity as it relates to Twitter, your first segment on Instagram was a bit sparse and that a bit more detail would definitely benefit your post (that being said, you made good use of images to bolster your content). One thing to consider when it comes to this assignment, it seems as though the comparison you make is more between your past online identity and your present self rather than a story of how your online avatar and your real life self have compared to each other over a period of time. I feel like the way you have written it is a fine analysis on its own, but it is just something to consider if you find yourself needing more to write during your revision.

Other than these, there is not much else content-wise that I felt needed improving. -- Fred Durham

Megan, great page. Your hook brought me in as I also have had an online identity that stems back all the way to 2009, in addition to that I also try and maintain a consistent @grahameger on every form of social media. The non-typical section headings, such as "The Visual" also drew me in, something I'm sure I'm not alone it. I appreciate you attention to detail with how you thoroughly explain each main section after the section header. In particular I like the use of subheadings for you twitter section, especially the first sentence under the twitter section which fits in the (new 280 character) limit of a tweet. I liked your section about your decision of making posts private but would've liked to see more information on why exactly you made that choice. Overall, looking at the concluding paragraph does a great job at summarizing your online life by comparing it to your offline life, something that's really important to step back and do from time to time.

--Graham Eger

Corina

Great work, Megan!

For revision, your colleagues’ comments above are spot on. Please consider them fully.

Best,

Corina