Talk:Logan Meyer
Hey Logan!
First of all, I greatly appreciated your tone throughout the statement. The humor and authenticity accurately reflect who you are as a person. I laughed out loud looking at the “early profile photo” you posted. I was also thoroughly amused by the section about your mom and how she brags about you on Facebook.
When you wrote, “I also tend to upload photos in which I believe the photo makes my life look better or like it is more fun than it actually is,” it was very relatable, but something that other people tend to treat like the elephant in the room. You addressed it head on. Further, I never realized how promoting events and organizations that Facebook users are involved with is actually a way to make their lives appear more successful. I thought that was an interesting observation.
Your statement successfully illustrated the evolution of your Facebook behavior. I got a good idea as to how your posting habits have changed overtime. Your use of screenshots comparing the way you posted originally to how you post now served that purpose well.
I thought that your “targeted advertisements” section was a unique idea that could have been expanded further. Why is Facebook showing you ads for products, rather than nonprofit foundations and charities? What aspects of your Facebook profile is Facebook using to curate the advertisements you see on your feed?
Relating your autobiographical statement to class concepts could have made your work stronger. It might have helped your audience to understand your overall theme and relate your work to their own if they applied similar concepts.
Additionally, more closely proofreading your statement would improve its fluidity. I am a total grammar nut, so I was probably more distracted by the occasional missing comma than the average reader would be. But it is still an aspect you could work on to make your statement even stronger.
Overall, I feel like you succinctly summarized your Facebook persona in a way that was insightful and entertaining to read. Your use of screenshots throughout the statement kept me engaged, and I enjoyed your down-to-earth style!
Sara Otto
Logan,
I really appreciated your take on your Facebook avatar and how it may or may not be authentically you. Similarly, in mine I struggled to decide whether my avatar would be considered authentic or not. Like you, I have grown pickier the older I get and I post less and less on Facebook, and what I do post, makes me look good. I do consider what I post to be authentic; however, I also don’t post a lot of things.
I really liked this analysis of your genuineness on Facebook. It seems like you have gotten less genuine in the way that you curate your posts more as time has gone on. I think this happens naturally for a lot of people as they age and become more and more aware of how other people see them. I’m not sure how I feel about this progression for me because I would like to think I don’t care what others think of me, but also if putting a little more time into my Facebook avatar makes me look better, then I will do it (and have done it).
I think that you utilized your screen shots very well and it illustrated all your points. I also very much enjoyed the humor you wrote with. Both of these things along with your organization of your thoughts made this analysis of your Facebook avatar very interesting to read and described yourself really well. One thing that I would do to improve your writing is just proofread a little more. There were some awkwardly worded sentences from time to time> However, over all, I thought this was really good and enjoyed reading it.
Maximilian Darr
