Talk:Lily Jin

Comment from Alexandra Sterchele:

Hi Lily, this was a very well-written and informative piece on your identity search. I like how you used multiple platforms and sources to further analyze how your media presence is portrayed and how much information is available about you at a click of a button. You included a strong thesis that was upheld with the evidence you provided throughout your MediaWiki Article. A recommendation I’d make would be to provide a backstory of how you protected (or didn’t) your identity before this assignment. Additionally, if you aren’t proud of your current online identity what are your plans to fix this, or what precautions will you take in the future to protect yourself? This could include deleting your VSCO or setting your Twitter to private mode. Overall, I think you did a great job with the flow between ideas, relaying your online identity in comparison to your thesis, and the steps you took to research this topic!

Comment by Kierra Davis

Hi Lily, your page was an enjoyable read and it was really thoughtful and engaging. I liked that you started off discussing your initial experience and perception of Instagram - I think this worked pretty effectively for the opening paragraph, and it tied well into how you think about your social media presence now. The organization of the draft seems great with how you first discuss the general information that's online about you and then move on to more specifics in your own social media, and all of the information logically followed from the preceding statements. It was interesting that you included some of your reflections on what people could piece together about your socioeconomic status and what that might imply about not only your life in the past, but also the future.

I was able to get a clear idea of what your online information says about you and how accurately it relates. You did a good job of synthesizing and reflecting on the kind of person you appear to be on the internet. My only suggestion is to re-read over the draft again as there were just a couple grammatical errors. Other than that, great job!