Talk:Krithik Vallem

Comment from Aaron Zhang

I think your article could use some more sectioning or subsections. Your main Google search portion is around ¾ of the article with no subsections to break it down. You can break them up by area of search: jobs, clubs, social media, etc. I think you should also start with an introduction paragraph. Something about what you think data identity means and your expectations going into this assignment. I would take part of your possible explanations and use that in this opening paragraph. Also, I think you focus too much on what other people can assume based on what they can find online. I would suggest that you shift your focus towards how your data identity matches your actual identity. I don’t think you talk about what you think your identity is. Instead of hypothesizing about what a random person would think of you, you can talk about what you think about your data identity and why you think it came to be that way.

Comment from David Song

Hi Krithik, I really enjoyed reading your digital identity statement. Your struggle of being more easily identifiable on the Internet was not one that I could personally relate to, but you more than aptly explained your stance on it. In particular, the section I found most interesting was where you contrasted the language-based results that Facebook gave. Search engines and recommendations are already mind-bogglingly difficult to fully comprehend but when you factor in a global community of users, the range of possible interactions seem incomprehensible. I think your statement could use a smoother introduction as I found the immediate transition to talking about Google results a bit jarring. For instance, you could begin your statement by literally talking about “google results and what they might mean”, which might help with its flow. All in all, I thought your analysis of your digital identity was very well-reasoned and I’m excited to see how you might improve upon it.