Talk:Kelsey Toporski
Jacob Polson's Comment
Hi Kelsey, I really like this write-up about you and your data identity. I especially liked the little headliner before the introduction that was in the third person. In general, I think this post is really well written, so the suggestions I make might be a bit of a stretch on if they will actually improve this article. One thing that stuck out to me in both of our cases is that our social media use started to dwindle as we got further into college. Similarly, which appeared to be the case for almost every post I've read on this site, our data broker profiles were lacking and old. I'm really curious to see if there is any correlation there. You could potentially touch base on that, or touch base on how your lack of social media use might be affecting your technological footprint? Another very slight thing I want to point out is the image size in your Images section. It's not a huge issue but it was slightly hard to follow what you were saying when the indentation of the words allows for 1-3 words per line. Maybe resizing the picture to be a little smaller could clean that up. Overall though, I thought this was a really good article.
Taylor Denby's Comment
Hey Kelsey, I really enjoyed your analysis of your data identity and how it relates to your personal self. It's very well written, and the analysis was thorough. I think the biggest improvements I would recommend are expanding a bit more on the data broker reports, and what they got wrong as well as what information they did have that was findable by googling yourself. I liked your ending statement, that you are more than your digital footprint. I also agree with the other comment, that your photos could be smaller to clean up formatting. However, I enjoyed your article and thought it was very well made.
Jack Pakela's Comment
Hey Kelsey, It was a pleasure reading your draft on the data-identity assignment! You really do a great job of keeping the reader engaged by having a good flow as well as portraying the content in an entertaining way. Here are some suggestions I have:
- I think it would be cool to add some more photos regarding your data identity report. I think it would be interesting to see exactly what it looks like and how the data is portrayed. You could blur out the information if you want, but having more visuals is always a good thing!
- I would add some references, perhaps a class reading or an article of some sorts. I feel it would help strengthen your analysis even further
- I don't know if you did this, but I would suggest to try googling your name using quotes (ex. "Kelsey Toporski"). When you put quotes around a google search, it ensures that every piece of data that pops up will contain the words around the quotes.
Overall, super solid job!
