Talk:Jan Konarzewski
Peer Comment #1:
Jan,
To start, I thought that the introduction paragraph of your avatar was helpful in providing some background information on avatars, specifically relating to Facebook in this online context. I found it easy to follow your avatar, as you introduced events incorporated in your Facebook page to suggest that 1) you are a student at the University of Michigan and 2) you are involved in aquatics. I feel that you could have expanded a little bit further here, by explaining what this means about how your Facebook identity is portrayed to others.
I thought it was interesting how you explained how "Likes" are not necessarily that important of an aspect that one should follow when looking at people's Facebook avatars, as they are not often fully depictive of the truth. I thought the part about your profile pictures was good to include, especially relating to tags and other photos of you and your friends on Facebook and how they represent your online identity. However, I feel that you could have taken this a little further and expanded on how these photos and tags effect your Facebook acculturation...
I liked your example on how Facebook does not know when your "true" graduation date is, because you have not updated this information on your Facebook profile page. What does this say about activity and involvement on Facebook? Do you leave certain details out or "make-up" certain things to protect privacy/anonymity? I also enjoyed the pictures you included and thought that they fit well with the text in your autobiography, although some of them were small and hard to see (may be wiki's fault?).
Overall, I thought your avatar captured your Facebook identity well and explained to the reader your degree of involvement on your Facebook page in a third person point of view!
-Neel Sikand
Jan:
I liked how you brought up how events as an indicator of how a person is represented on Facebook. I didn't think much about how the events that people attend could show what kind of person they are, and you did a good job in explaining how your attendance in the Michigan Water Carnival and Michigan Water Polo Game accurately reflects your interests in aquatics.
However, although you make some good analysis on the likes, events, and photo elements of your profile, I think it lacks some explanation of who you actually are. I got a bit confused when reading, because whenever you were about to explain an element you say that we as readers can't actually assume what you were saying.
I definitely think the photo visual you put of your tagged pictures was good, because it shows readers how much swimming is a part of your life. Moreover, I liked your take on this assignment. I thought it was creative. There were some issues with logical flow, grammar, and style but overall, good job!
./Jenn_Leung
