Talk:James Li

Thomas Mazzola

I thought your post was really well done. The narrative flowed well and your argument was great. You talked about how you were sort of a needle in a haystack when it came to looking yourself up because of your very common last name and pretty common first name and that because of that all your online information was hard to find. I thought it was good that you talked about both the pros and cons to having such a common last name. I also thought the point you made about how now you know what to expect to find on yourself when you look online, and how now you're better prepared to manage expectations about your online persona was a good point to make. Lastly I agree with your conclusion that any data on you that is online is only surface level information, none of it was deep or personal, I thought that was a great point to make.

Charlie Peng's Comments

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your post and the paragraphs were sectioned off well to allow for great transitioning and flows between paragraphs. Your post was very relatable to the audience that was targeted and difficulty narrowing down the search on these search engines is understandable. I thought your concluding paragraph on we don't really live on the internet and only some past selves of us are was very eye-opening. However, I thought your paper could use more analysis on what you thought your authentic data profile was, and how it compared to what you really found online. Overall, it was an enjoyable read so great work!

Kavya Pratapa's Comments

Hi James, I thought your post was well-written! Your voice as a writer was clear and was spread throughout the piece, which made it a very engaging and interesting read. I especially liked your concluding arguments and felt that you could expand on the idea of your online persona being only a snapshot of who you are. To that point, something that I think you could improve on is adding subsections/sub-headings to your article. I think you make a lot of great points throughout your piece, but it's easy to get lost when there is a lot being discussed in every paragraph. Therefore, by adding sub-headings that are related to the topics you discuss in your paragraphs, I think that it would be a lot easier for readers to follow your argument. Another thing that I would possibly expand on is perhaps your reactions to the fact that you didn't see much about yourself when you just searched your name. You definitely mention how your name is common, so I think that learning more about your reactions coming from a perspective of having a common name would be super interesting to read. I also noticed some grammatical errors, such as using 'its' vs. 'it's', so I would make sure that you fix this during your final revision. Overall, great work!