Talk:Hamza Baccouche
To Hamza, I saw the header for "Indecent Exposure: Part 1" and was immediately intrigued, so brownie points for cool headers & the Lil Wayne quote. You did an excellent job constantly weaving evidence into your thesis, which I assume is along the lines of the fact that "the stuff about me that's out in the open that I'm really concerned about is largely within my power to change." Maybe expand a bit on how your ideas relate to the Floridi reading that you cited, it'd be great to hear more about how his ideas of transparency apply to your digital footprint as well as the findings of your data identity search. I found your post to be very interesting and a little humorous. I remained engaged throughout the time I spent reading it and was easily able to follow the flow of information and your train of thought. I think you did a fantastic job assessing how relative your data identity is to what you believe to be the real you. It was also very interesting that you talked about your own efforts to minimize your social media presence, it really added to your thesis. Overall, great job!
Commenter: Serene Saldaña (serenesa)
Comment by Fahrawn Gill:
Hamza, Well done, I really enjoyed reading your Wikipedia page. Your introduction was a good insight into your intention to minimize your online presence, and the actions you have taken to do so. Further, moving onto the "Indecent Exposure: Part 1" section, you go into detail about your presence on Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter, and Snapchat which was interesting to hear. It may be nice to elaborate here on how you might interpret your suspension as a 13-year-old in the context of this course, and how easy it was for you to create a new profile. Another change you might want to make is to your last sentence of Indecent Exposure: Part 1, because it seems to me that it's not that the "people" lack transparency (if "people" refer to the potential strangers accessing your online profiles), but rather, the data brokers who allow and encourage people discovering you.
In "Indecent Exposure: Part 2", I appreciated reading about your BeenVerified Report, and your Google search results. I would have been interested to read more detail about things from high school that show up, and more about how you feel about these results showing up.
Finally, in your concluding "Doing My Digital Laundry" section, you end nicely, reflecting on your past online presence, and reaffirming your intention to minimize your online presence. In here, you might want to give more detail about "online authenticity", and how online identities can be used as a "replacement", because that is a very strong implication.
Regarding your heading titles - While witty, I don't really think the crude "Indecent Exposure" double-meaning really makes sense in the context of this Wikipedia article. The reason I am even mentioning this is because after reading you describe how the "exposure" you are minimizing is very personal, and having to do with keeping your social presence restricted to the people who matter to you (friends and family), I found myself feeling a little confused about how this would imply that you are being "indecent" in the case where you do not restrict your online presence. If you maybe made clear, and went into detail about how it is "indecent" to allow strangers or loose acquaintances to discover specific information that you want to keep discreet, then the headings would make more sense to me. This may be a nitpick, but it did genuinely confuse me upon reflecting on your article, and may be something you want to change. But otherwise this is a great Wikipedia page, and I'm glad to have learned about your experience.
Best, Fahrawn
