Talk:Emma Brown

Aidan Haase's comments:

Hi Emma,

I really enjoyed reading your online data identity statement. Being someone with a relatively unique name that causes Google to throw my social media accounts at me right away, it was really interesting to read about your experience with this assignment from the perspective of having a very common name. I like how you set up your analysis by first talking about your expectations, then walking the reader through the process you took of many different search queries. I think that was effective in highlighting your thesis and gave you a great landing point for analysis on the accuracy and its implications. I also really appreciated your hook/intro! I think that your analysis of comparing your data identity to reality is really nice. One way I think that this could be improved is to expand a little bit more on the Implications of Personal Privacy section. You mention how even though your social media accounts are “public”, given the accessibility of them from a google search they seem quite private, and it would be interesting to know if that changes or how you interact on social media or not after doing this research. Overall, I thought this was really good analysis and I really like your style of writing!

Elizabeth Bott's Comment

Hi Emma,

I really enjoyed reading your article. I thought it was really interesting how specific you had to get with your searches in order to find any information about yourself. I liked the flow of your article in that your searches got more specific and more 'accurate'. I think splitting your analysis up into the 3 parts helped really strengthen your overall thesis, as the accuracy helped tie your 3 searches together into one more overarching identity.

One thing I thing you potentially add to your analysis to make it even stronger would be to elaborate a little bit more on how your online identity is different/doesn't represent you now (like what about you know makes the online identity not fit) . I think this addition in your article would make it even stronger.

Overall, i think you did a really good job with your article. The flow and structure worked really well. One small note grammatically, the first sentence of the "Expectations" paragraph was a little wordy and didn't flow well. But other than that it looked good!