Talk:Emily Fischer

David Schindler Comments

Hi Emily, I really enjoyed your data profile. Your style of writing is very readable, and I did not see any grammatical mistakes. It was interesting that even with active social media you were unable to find any of your accounts. I guess a common name will do that. I was wondering though do your social media accounts like twitter or Instagram have your full name listed or is it just a handle/nickname. I do believe this would make it harder for google to find you. Congrats on your software engineering job, I wonder how easy it is to find your LinkedIn and if there are ways for you to increase your exposure. As another Software Engineer, I am more than willing to have a very public LinkedIn while I would prefer for other parts of my identity to not exist online. The seriousness of your purpose was very strong. I do believe you well characterized your true identity vs your lack of identity online. One part that I do disagree with is that I do think work is part of our identity. As Software Engineers we spend so much time in the tech world much of our views, thoughts and hobbies are shaped by that. So maybe clarify on this point a bit more. And If you disagree with this elaborate on it. Also the idea of wanting to be unique but this not being the case online was interesting, so I would say try to explore that more. Great job!

Kunal Singh Comments

I think you did a great job with your data identity article! From a quality of writing standpoint, I think you did a terrific job not only from a grammatical standpoint, but also having a writing with your "voice". I truly felt like you illustrated your thoughts with your voice and still managed to make the article professional, grammatically correct, and keep it well-structured. Given that you start by talking a lot about how it is really hard to find yourself on Google because of your really common name, I think you should expand on that idea in some type of way. You ask yourself a few questions later in the article about ~"how it makes you feel" and I think you should expand on some of those thoughts. I think that will help you create more of a story to continue along the path of yourself being pretty hard to find online. If you add a few more thoughts later in the article, I think that will further strengthen your article and tell your online/data story even better. Overall, I thought you did a really good job with your writing and post in general. (And congrats on your job!)

Jack McCafferty Comment

I really enjoy your introduction paragraph, it does a great job at establishing your online presence and why you use the Internet. It also might help to mention what else you use the Internet for besides social networking. What is it used for in the other 4 hours? Maybe you could talk about how it is important in your day to day life especially with school. I also enjoy how your google section mentions your sense of shock that you were hard to find. I think it would help improve the section more if you included more analysis on how you feel about having all these names overlap your own. Does it have an effect on your sense of being unique in such a large world. Furthermore, I believe it would help to include more on your data broker. You do mention it in a section but the paragraph really only lays out what you saw and not much analysis on what you saw. Finally, I really enjoy how you concluded the wiki and brought your thoughts full circle.