Talk:Deepika Yuvaraj

Deepika, Your reflection on your essay was good. I liked how you thoroughly went through each aspect of the avatar features and described some of the troubles you had. It sounds like you didn’t have much of a good experience doing it. It was interesting to hear that you felt that your fantasy avatar felt more like you without having to look exactly like you.

With this, you discussed more about the program, and I feel like you could have added more about yourself and your personal experiences. It was hard to understand some of your identity issues because I don't know you or your experiences. Also, I would have been interested to hear how you feel your identity is and how it was affected by your presentation in your avatar. With your fantasy avatar, was there anything else that motivated you or just that you had more options? I think these things would have made your reflection more personable.

In general, I liked your essay and how constrictions and options influenced your essay. Sounds like you had a lot more power with the fantasy one. I think writing more about yourself and your own experiences and connecting it to your avatar or showing dissonance would have greatly helped your paper, but overall, it was good!

Best, Fred Reilly

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