Talk:Copyright Law in Entertainment

Peer reviewed by Jared Bonebright

1) ~970 words, a good length for the draft. Very thorough section on youtube. Definitely more room to expand on history and music for the final draft. Some sub-sections of music you could look at are sampling and re-recording to get around the recording copyrights, and there’s a group of people who are putting every possible combination of 8 notes on a hard drive to have every possible melody in a tangible medium to release into the public domain. Up to you but loopholes like that could be interesting to bring up.

2) a) Solid opening. I like the specific legal context just to get that out of the way since the legal nitty gritty probably isn’t what you want to focus on later.

b) Once again good body at this point. As I said in 1) there's quite a lot of room to expand in my opinion. It also might be better if you narrow the focus to digital copyright issues since that’s what you’re spending most of the time on anyways.

c) You have a good list of sources, missing in-text citations and the ‘proper’ citations for some of the links. Past that, you’ll probably want to end up with more than 8 sources but since this is just a draft I’m sure that won't be an issue.

3) I understand the implications of copyright from my life outside of the article, and I think you do a good job explaining it near the end of your sections. I would recommend making ethical stakes clear immediately in each section unless you plan to have ethical issues as their own section later on.

4) You’re doing a great job with the neutral point of view. There are a couple of words that feel like they have extra baggage like “Imperative” instead of important showing a sense of urgency, but it doesn’t interfere with understanding or seem like it communicates a strong opinion so I don’t think its that big of a deal.

Feedback Template:

1 Length Verify the length of the article and comment on it.

2 Structure Does the article include the 3 major components of a good article? (1) an opening paragraph that summarizes the issue, 2) the body of the article in one or more sections, 3) statements are backed up by references to reliable sources. Elaborate on how the author met each component and how they can improve.

3 Clarity Is the issue at stake clear to you? Do you understand what are the ethical issues exposed in the article and why they are important?

4 Objective reporting (Neutral point of view) Is the article reporting on ethical issues / controversies objectively? i.e., The author does not state personal opinions; if there are multiple stakeholders involved in a controversy, the author reports on multiple perspectives on the same issue; all statements are backed up by references; the author does not argue for anything, simply describes a controversy.