Talk:Allison Paciorka
I thought that you did a great job analyzing the genuineness of your Facebook page. Although you keep your Facebook page up-to-date, I thought it was great that you still found gaps existing between your real and online identities. Your analysis of the emotion in the statuses that you post allowed me to re-evaluate my own Facebook activity. I liked how you touched on the fact that you usually only post about the positive things in your life, rather than the negative, which may lead people to believe that you are always happy and cheerful. Therefore, a slightly unauthentic version of you is depicted to others. I also thought you made a great point in evaluating WHO you talk to on Facebook, as you noted that the people you are closest to are not the ones you interact with the most in this online environment. Your style and flow of writing was nicely done as well. Overall, I really liked your autobiographical statement as I thought you made some great points in discussing some of the limiting the features of Facebook and how they relate to the authenticity of your identity. - Cara Baughman
Great autobiography. As a reader I find it very entertaining, well illustrated and unique.
Personally I think that you were very genuine and honest in your article. Since you even mention that your profile does not totally reflect who you are in real person or everything shown on it is accurate. It takes a lot of effort to make a self-analysis, and I can see that you did a successful job at it by explaining and going through closely about every part of your profile. You analyzed from your pictures to your profile’s map where you confidently stated that it is not accurate.
You used a very interesting writing style. In the beginning I felt as if I was the one analyzing your profile page. With this third person walkthrough of your profile, you successfully achieved to get into the readers mind and get his attention. On the rest of your autobiography you change your style to first person, which gives it an interesting touch. You gave it a non-academic touch that made me feel that you were personally telling me your story. Finally you wrap by explaining how Facebook is important to your life personally and professionally. Your autobiography had a very natural flow and you successfully changed topics by putting different titles. I was not able to find any grammatical mistakes.
- German Ostaszynski
