Talk:Alibaba

1. Length

The current length of the article is under 3000 words. Although that is shorter than your intended end goal, you have good topics to talk about as well as good starters. I feel that you can get the 3,000 word count done easily by adding extra information to the topics already covered. You also have some empty topics, meaning you will have plenty to talk about to fill up the 3,000 word count. I would also consider adding additional topics, such as examples of items Alibaba sells, or examples of big steps the companies make to improve and/or expand. I feel like I learned about the background of Alibaba but do not really know what they do.

2. Structure

As far as the structure of the Wikipedia article, you correctly implemented the intro paragraph, body sections, as well as added reliable sources. The intro paragraph brings up three major topics which you address in all three of your major paragraphs. I don’t have much advice on improving your opening paragraph as I believe it serves as a good intro into the rest of your article. The body paragraphs have great information, but can be added to, with more specific facts and sources. Additionally, the page can be spiced up a little bit with adding more images (at least one more image is required for this article). For example, you could potentially ad pictures of products that Alibaba sells, or maybe a picture describing one of Alibaba’s ethical concerns. Your sources seem to be cited correctly, and many of the sources, if not all, look to be very reliable with their information. Something to keep in mind as you finish your article is that your structure might change slightly since you still need to add a lot of information. Just be careful that it does not mess up the good flow you have currently.

3. Clarity

Your writing allows me to clearly see what is at stake. You mention clearly the three major ethical issues with Alibaba right now, which include Environmental Flaws, Sexual Harassment, and Counterfeit Goods. Your writing’s flow is solid and connects the intro paragraph with your body paragraphs very nicely. It would be nice if, as previously mentioned, you could add more details to the ethical issues section. Additionally, maybe speaking on efforts Alibaba is making to improve their ethical efforts could add significant word count, as well as show Alibaba in “right side” instead of only the “wrong side”, which would improve your objective reporting further. With that being said, the fact that your article is clear about what is at stake with very few words, shows that you have solid information and many POVs present through your article.

4. Objective Reporting

You do a very good job of not sounding biased in your article. I searched up key words in your article that could potentially make your article biases. Although you do use some of the key words I just mentioned, you use those specific words in a way where the reporting is still objective and unbiased. As mentioned previously, adding information on efforts Alibaba is taking to improve their public opinion on ethical efforts may be worth adding, as it shows how Alibaba is succeeding in some regard, while also showing where they are coming up short. Although your article does a superb job at staying objective currently, just be aware that since you need to add a lot of information to your article, that you remain objective and unbiased. My best advice for this is to be cognizant of your word choice (actually use ctrl/command f to look for those key words that may make your article biased – see rubric).