Talk:Yu-Gi-Oh! Trading Card Game
I really love the topic you chose and for the most part, your article looks good! Your article looks to be around 2950 words or so, which is well within the suggested word count and seems to be pretty evenly distributed between each of your topics. The structure of your article also looks pretty good. Looking specifically at the “Cards” section of your article, you seem to start with the most basic aspect of each card, namely whether it is a spell, monster, or trap, and then onto the varieties/subcategories of each of these types. Talking about the different types of cards and their rarity encompasses the rest of the section. That being said, I see a distinct lack of sources for a lot of your article, especially the first half or so. I understand that it can feel difficult to link sources for what might feel like objective facts of Yu-Gi-Oh! cards and product, but I think it would really help the reader to verify your information as well as learn more if they would like, even if it’s simply links to the official rules site.
Looking at the structure of one of your controversy paragraphs, you seem to start with the basic information required to understand the issue, “Upper Deck Entertainment is a trading card company headquartered in the United States”, succinctly discuss it, and end with a short, but satisfying and informative conclusion to the lawsuit, “Upper Deck is no longer involved with Yu-Gi-Oh! in any capacity.” In that regard, I think your structure looks great, although I do wish more of the article was dedicated to the ethical issues instead of only the last 500 words or so.
Most of the topics you decided to explain were done so clearly. I was, however, a little confused in your “Business Practices” section. I don’t see any great links to the rarity of cards, but it sounds as if Konami is ultimately responsible for the distribution of cards and can make cards as rare as they like. Why is it wrong for them to deliberately “short print” cards? Isn’t that just like making a card more rare? If rare cards appear less often, so too then do these “short print” cards, and I don’t entirely see how that’s ethically or morally wrong. I do like your paragraph on censorship, although I wish you had included statements from Konami on why they chose to censor certain cards or what other analysts might believe the incentive is.
I also believe that you could move unofficial simulators into the ethical issues portion of your article if you elaborate more on it. If these simulators are the only way to play Yu-Gi-Oh! online against other players, will Konami shut it down after now having released Master Duel recently? Is it ethical to use unlicensed software illegally if Konami is deliberately not sending a cease-and-desist order? Have there been news reports or articles written about this topic that you could cite from?
As for objective reporting and a neutral point of view, I again wish that you had included more sources for your statements. When mentioning some of the Yu-Gi-Oh! anime has been censored, I wish you would provide links to some of the scenes that had been changed, or articles discussing this. For the 4 ethical issues you talked about, you successfully provided Konami’s response for three of them (although one of them you mentioned that Konami simply declined to comment), but I would again love to hear if Konami has commented on their censorship of both cards and anime.
All in all, I believe that you have written an informative article about Yu-Gi-Oh! and its representation in cards and anime alike, but I think your article would be best served by adding more sources to the first half of your article, seeing if you can find a response or reason from Konami on why they censor, and possibly expanding the ethical issues section of your article as a whole. -Alex Pynnonen
