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Though I like the whole Twitter vs. Facebook idea, I think you could have executed it a little better. I thought the random “vs.” after the Facebook blurb was confusing and out of place. I understand why it’s there, but it seems random and unnecessary in the grand scheme of the entry. If I were you, I would take a look at reorganizing the entry and looking more into how your Facebook and Twitter personas interact and clash with each other, as opposed to just asking questions about them and answering them rather superficially. Overall, I enjoyed the questions you posed to yourself, but I would have liked to see a little more of an in depth analysis on how you present yourself to your Facebook friends and Twitter followers. | Though I like the whole Twitter vs. Facebook idea, I think you could have executed it a little better. I thought the random “vs.” after the Facebook blurb was confusing and out of place. I understand why it’s there, but it seems random and unnecessary in the grand scheme of the entry. If I were you, I would take a look at reorganizing the entry and looking more into how your Facebook and Twitter personas interact and clash with each other, as opposed to just asking questions about them and answering them rather superficially. Overall, I enjoyed the questions you posed to yourself, but I would have liked to see a little more of an in depth analysis on how you present yourself to your Facebook friends and Twitter followers. | ||
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Revision as of 02:36, 22 February 2018
Hi Vincent! I like the content of your opening paragraph. I think it proposes some very thought provoking questions that you explore throughout your entry and that made me think a little bit more about my entry and my presence on social media. I feel like you really explored those questions through analyzing your social media accounts, but it was a little bit choppy at certain points and I felt like there was no emotion or feeling put into the writing, particularly in your analysis of your Facebook account. I would have liked to see a little more in the way of answering the questions you posed to yourself at the end of the first paragraph. Through the Twitter analysis, I thought that I got to know more about you and your interests. I like the way you speak about your online persona and how they interact with their followers and such. Your comparison between the two really helps to form a picture of who you are as a person and how you interact with those around you.
Though I like the whole Twitter vs. Facebook idea, I think you could have executed it a little better. I thought the random “vs.” after the Facebook blurb was confusing and out of place. I understand why it’s there, but it seems random and unnecessary in the grand scheme of the entry. If I were you, I would take a look at reorganizing the entry and looking more into how your Facebook and Twitter personas interact and clash with each other, as opposed to just asking questions about them and answering them rather superficially. Overall, I enjoyed the questions you posed to yourself, but I would have liked to see a little more of an in depth analysis on how you present yourself to your Facebook friends and Twitter followers.
- -Alyssa Schmidt
