Talk:Tianshuo Yan

Comments from Brant Verlinde

Hi Tianshuo! I found it very interesting to hear about the discrepancies between Google and Baidu as I have only ever been exposed to Google. You bring up a great point about how the algorithms behind each of these platforms could influence which information appears first, like good or bad news about a celebrity. I really like the organization and structure of your article as well, the headers and subheadings made it very clear what was being discussed, and the flow between them was easy to follow. If I had to suggest an improvement, I think adding a little more to the “Google” and “Present Usage” sections would be useful. In your current draft they only include a sentence or two, and I think they would be great additions if they had a little more in them. Great job!

Comments from Sam Rechner

你好 Tianshuo,

Great job on this piece. I really enjoyed reading about how your digital footprint has developed. I thought your introduction was solid and presented your background information in a simple, effective, and anecdotal way. I also really appreciated the way you structured the statement. Transitions from paragraph to paragraph were very clean and the topic sentences made your discussion points more organized. I also thought your comparison between search engines was a great way to observe/discuss data collection. It was a nice way to broaden the topics and discuss larger implications of data collection. I thought your concluding thoughts section was also extremely well done. Your mentioning of Floridi and his quote on our generation possibly being the last to notice distinctions between offline and online states is so relevant to the data/online privacy conversation. One suggestion I have is to reorganize your paragraphs so your social media usage section follows your introduction. This way you'll be able to transition nicely from "reasons behind the change" to discussing the search engine implications. All in all, your piece was awesome though!

Comments from Zhiyuan Sun

Hi Tianshuo Yan! It is nice to read your statement about yourself! You did a good job on your search job and writing statement. Unlike others who are from the US., you wrote your uniquess as being a Chinese. It might be hard to find information gather website in China but you used WeChat and QQ space instead, which is good. I have the same feeling for you in many aspects! For example, I was also forced to learn many hobbies and take classes as a child. Also, I sent what I would perceive as stupid to QQ space too! As for improvement, I think that you can probably add more pages talking about your own feelings and thoughts. Besides, it would be great if you can spend more time talking about the result from Google.