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You do a great job of detailing the search for your identity, and all the different methods that you went through in pursuit of information on yourself. | You do a great job of detailing the search for your identity, and all the different methods that you went through in pursuit of information on yourself. | ||
| − | However, with all of your search method details, it's hard to tell your reaction to this search, | + | However, with all of your search method details, it's hard to tell your reaction to this search. In short, it doesn't feel very personalized or authentic to you. To fix this, I suggest doing the following: more analysis of the information that you did find, as well as images to help illustrate the search, also, explain how you craft your data identity, and what steps you're taking in light of this search. |
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| + | The use of images would also help to break up the text, which can be overwhelming to take in. Additionally, headers would help to this end too. | ||
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Latest revision as of 13:18, 19 February 2019
Zi's comments
Hi Suzanna,
You do a great job of detailing the search for your identity, and all the different methods that you went through in pursuit of information on yourself.
However, with all of your search method details, it's hard to tell your reaction to this search. In short, it doesn't feel very personalized or authentic to you. To fix this, I suggest doing the following: more analysis of the information that you did find, as well as images to help illustrate the search, also, explain how you craft your data identity, and what steps you're taking in light of this search.
The use of images would also help to break up the text, which can be overwhelming to take in. Additionally, headers would help to this end too.
Hey Suzanna,
Straight off the bat, I think it would be super helpful for you to break your page down into different parts using headings and subheadings to give it the look of a Wikipedia page. This will make reading and compartmentalizing your data collection easier as well in my opinion. Besides the superficial layout of your page, I think your research and analysis is really interesting, especially since you do a great job of explaining the effects that each of the findings had on you and exactly the manner in which you went about getting those results. The "find what data google has on you" section is very unique and helpful since it will act as a resource for others readings this as well. You do a great job pooling all the data together and interpreting your results, and the genuineness of your research definitely comes across. I think the breaking down and classifying of each relevant section will streamline all your data and findings, and make the article a lot more cohesive and structured. Throwing in screenshots of your findings will also help add a visual layer to the article, and make it superficially appealing to readers. Apart from this, there are small spelling errors in a couple of places which a quick spell check should throw up immediately. Thanks for sharing!
Comment by : Advait Shroff (advaitsh)
