Talk:Steven Wang
Hey Steven, your post is structured well and it’s a very clean and easy to read format. I find it interesting that you, like pretty much everyone else started your online presence with only wanting a higher number of likes/friends/followers but found yourself becoming more conscious about who you added and what people were able to see. I think that says a lot about who you are and how you perceive social media and privacy.
One thing I would include is your view of the “online you” versus the ”physical you”. The assignment asks us to talk about the ethical relationship between these two versions of us and I think it would help your post if you could elaborate on how you perceive your online identity relative to your physical identity. Whether you think the two are both correct, or only a small piece of your real identity, or maybe one of them is just a public facing identity that is completely different from the real you. Either way, I think some more conceptual writing about the ethics of the online vs offline identities would beef up your conclusion to really round out a good post.
-Hayden Macfarlane
I enjoyed reading your statement, particularly the fact that you start it by stating your previous things you did, or rather didn't, do to have privacy online. I also liked your way of talking about your findings about your Google searches and your similarities and differences in the data broker report. However, in the beginning section you mention that now you pay more attention to your online presence, who you follow, and who you are friends with, but what is the reason for this. This reasoning will help illustrate a central theme to your statement that is not apparent right now. You explained why you were not worried before, but what changed? These things will help tie in the "Privacy To Me" section, because to me, right now, it seems random without the explanation at the beginning.
Also, in your conclusion, you mention the general information people will find, like ethnicity/race, education, etc. but are there other specific things than this on your Facebook or LinkedIn that are public, which may allow people to create a identity of you? And how is/would this identity be different or similar to who you actually are?
-Parth Patel
Hi Steven,
First, I want to commend you on doing a good job with your post. The structure of your piece was logical and each piece transitioned well into the next. I think what could be added though is more reflection on how you are portrayed as someone different or the same when looking at your "digital-self" as compared to your "real-self". In your introduction you mentioned how you are more conservative in terms of your "digital footprint", but I would've liked to have heard your thoughts on the specifics that led to this switch. Are you worried about your posts having a negative affect on your job prospects? Or perhaps have you just grown up?
Overall, if you add a bit more reflection on some of your sections, it would really help flesh out your post.
Best,
Alan Yu
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Hi Steven,
Excellent article. You had a great introduction showing us your gradual accumulation of social media platforms and the change in your data awareness as time went on. I also really enjoyed your bit on privacy and found your thoughts interesting regarding Google and Instagram as a business providing convenience in exchange for some of your privacy. Your thoughts regarding this were very clear and concise, and it was a very refreshing perspective. I thought you could expand on the data broker section and explain what you think your data identity is, or how people on the internet may view you. Perhaps a little more searching for information available about yourself might provide some insight into this.
Great article, and I look forward to seeing how it expands.
Qhoe.
