Talk:Sophie Hoffman

Alana Woloshin's Comments

I really enjoyed your introduction. I think it framed your statement really nicely and gave me an insight into what you were thinking throughout this process. Your name seems common so it is not surprising to me that you had to add your hometown. Because of this I would have loved to read more about your middle school soccer team, something that is unique to your online identity. "I found that I’d unknowingly protected myself from being found by people I don’t know by disallowing search engines to link to my profile". I found this line really interesting especially because it is usually the opposite. I would love to read a little more about what you felt about this as well, since your privacy seems more protected than most other people. Overall, your writing was fantastic and it was an extremely interesting statement which your conclusion summed up very well. I saw the general class topics in your writing but perhaps it would benefit from a quote or two. Really good job Sophie, looking forward to reading the revision!

Harris Monoson's Comments

Hey Sophie! I think you did a great job on this assignment and I really enjoyed reading your piece. Like you said, it seems that you have a fairly common name which resulted it a massive amount of search results. I think your introduction was really powerful and so true - it is definitely tough to maintain a balance between "privacy and accuracy in the infosphere" I like how you spoke about your Facebook and social media platforms, and how even those didn't populate from the google search. Maybe consider showing your Facebook ad settings when talking about social media and see if the ad preferences showcase an accurate portrayal of your digital identity. You did a great job talking about data brokers and splitting them up into unpaid vs paid to show what sort of information was easier to find and what needed to be paid for in order to uncover. In your conclusion, you mentioned how someone might assume the information on a data broker site about you to be true because the basic facts may be accurate - and I agree, that's definitely a major issue to be concerned about! I think your piece can be made even better by adding a couple quotes and maybe connecting a reading or two from class and connect it to your writing about privacy and accuracy in social media and the infosphere. Great piece, your writing flowed very well, and I think it can be made even better with a few additions!