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| + | I really enjoyed your piece because it felt very real, thoughtful, and insightful. I feel like the things you mentioned like “I like knowing that I made”, “I like feeling a sense of superiority” is something that a lot of people also believe but don’t have the courage to say it like you do. It really seems like you left nothing on the table when going through and analyzing your avatar for this assignment, and it really shows in your writing. | ||
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| + | The statuses that you posted were hilarious and I can honestly say I that going back to read my own posts I had similar thoughts (“Unwitting social suicide”). It was interesting to see your transition from the Day 1 and 2 posts to today and how much your Facebook persona has changed. I do think that one thing you’re missing in your piece is a theme. It seems like your theme is authenticity and how that’s changed over time and it would have been nice to see a connection to some of the readings or ideas we’ve learned in class. | ||
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| + | Overall I really enjoyed reading your piece, had a good laugh, and appreciate your authenticity. | ||
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| + | -Paul Pal | ||
Revision as of 19:17, 31 March 2017
Hey Ritam! I thought your autobiography was extremely candid and insightful. I liked how you showed how your statuses changed over time and tied that back to your personality as well. The quality of writing was also really good throughout this piece and it was entertaining as well- I found myself laughing a few times. From your autobiography, I was able to get a better idea of why your Facebook is constructed the way it is, however, I think there is also room to elaborate on some other factors. For example, you state how alot of the content on your profile is "manufactured" and maybe going into this some more would be really interesting. Additionally, adding some more information about your audience and how that shapes the content you share would also be a good point of elaboration. You introduce a lot of great points and overall, this was a really enjoyable read and I definitely felt as though you were being genuine in your attempt to write this autobiography. Thanks for sharing this information with us!
-Rishika
Paul Commentary
Hi Ritam,
I really enjoyed your piece because it felt very real, thoughtful, and insightful. I feel like the things you mentioned like “I like knowing that I made”, “I like feeling a sense of superiority” is something that a lot of people also believe but don’t have the courage to say it like you do. It really seems like you left nothing on the table when going through and analyzing your avatar for this assignment, and it really shows in your writing.
The statuses that you posted were hilarious and I can honestly say I that going back to read my own posts I had similar thoughts (“Unwitting social suicide”). It was interesting to see your transition from the Day 1 and 2 posts to today and how much your Facebook persona has changed. I do think that one thing you’re missing in your piece is a theme. It seems like your theme is authenticity and how that’s changed over time and it would have been nice to see a connection to some of the readings or ideas we’ve learned in class.
Overall I really enjoyed reading your piece, had a good laugh, and appreciate your authenticity.
-Paul Pal
