Talk:Rachel Chang

I enjoyed the flow of your statement--the direct tone and use of succinct sentences made it easy for me to follow along and I could hear much of your personal voice with the reactions you had to the information you found. Structure-wise, your ideas are sectioned off well, though it could help to break up some of the paragraphs so they're not in very large blocks.

I was also interested in the discussion you brought up on the facial recognition and search algorithms, drawing connections with your experience with them through Facebook and Amazon. Maybe a screenshot of your differing Amazon purchases compared to your family or a photo of the number of search hits you obtain when you search your name can add visual emphasis to both the points you made about breaking the algorithm/having a very common name.

Additionally, I would recommend having some kind of overall conclusion discussing how these different sources of information come together to make your online data profile, and how that could impact your future (as you had touched on with concerns for your safety, and with future employment). This would help specify what you are arguing.

Best,
Natalie Lampa