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I really enjoyed your introduction to this assignment. I thought it was interesting how you started with "I am not special" and then explained why. I agree whole heartedly with your entire introduction and thought it flowed very nicely into the rest of your statement. It might be beneficial to add if your social media profiles ever came up with the google search and how much detail you had to include in order for your profiles to appear. The paragraph about the Facebook page was one that I identified with strongly, and the quote from Shoemaker fit in very nicely, but I do think it could benefit from another example. I thought that your line about "collaborative identity" really tied your whole statement together. This is a really interesting idea and I think your statement would be even better than it already was if you expanded on that as well. | I really enjoyed your introduction to this assignment. I thought it was interesting how you started with "I am not special" and then explained why. I agree whole heartedly with your entire introduction and thought it flowed very nicely into the rest of your statement. It might be beneficial to add if your social media profiles ever came up with the google search and how much detail you had to include in order for your profiles to appear. The paragraph about the Facebook page was one that I identified with strongly, and the quote from Shoemaker fit in very nicely, but I do think it could benefit from another example. I thought that your line about "collaborative identity" really tied your whole statement together. This is a really interesting idea and I think your statement would be even better than it already was if you expanded on that as well. | ||
Overall your writing flowed very nicely and the content of the class was integrated really well. Good job! | Overall your writing flowed very nicely and the content of the class was integrated really well. Good job! | ||
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Rachel, I really enjoyed your introduction to this assignment. I thought it was interesting how you started with "I am not special" and then explained why. I agree whole heartedly with your entire introduction and thought it flowed very nicely into the rest of your statement. It might be beneficial to add if your social media profiles ever came up with the google search and how much detail you had to include in order for your profiles to appear. The paragraph about the Facebook page was one that I identified with strongly, and the quote from Shoemaker fit in very nicely, but I do think it could benefit from another example. I thought that your line about "collaborative identity" really tied your whole statement together. This is a really interesting idea and I think your statement would be even better than it already was if you expanded on that as well. Overall your writing flowed very nicely and the content of the class was integrated really well. Good job! Commenter: Alana Woloshin (awoloshi)
