Talk:Pierre Gerondeau
Hi Pierre,
You give a good introductory paragraph about yourself and your background on using Facebook in a limited manner. This is useful because it lets the reader know that you do not use Facebook like how most other people use it. You use it for your future, so your Facebook is probably not the best representation of yourself. Your points about the authenticity of your profile are valid. The “likes” that you show on your Facebook and the pictures that you choose to present reveal only a side of yourself that is available online. They don’t show the full you, and you explain that in a clear manner. The things described about your privacy settings are consistent with the rest of the analysis, as limiting Facebook to revolving around helping with your future.
I totally agree with you on the things that Facebook does not represent well about yourself. Your sense of humor I am sure is probably not present on your profile not only because it is an online page but also because it is not capable of capturing a real life moment. Also, good choice of pictures that show your privacy settings. I thought that the analysis you provided throughout was concrete and very relevant to the assignment. Just another thing that you might want to fix is you have all of your sections under the “introduction” section. I think you probably meant to put them as different sections, but that’s easily fixable. Overall, the points you make are sharp and legitimate. You explain clearly that you use Facebook more as a networking tool rather as an outlet of social media, and back it up with how you do so. Only parts of yourself are shown through your Facebook, which you also explained. Well done!
-Philip
Pierre,
I find that you and I have very similar usages of Facebook and your analysis between your real life personality and your online persona was superb. You come across as very authentic in your post. Explaining your late start in your use of Facebook helped frame the rest of the post as it reinforced the notion that you approach Facebook with the understanding that other people outside of your friends and family may and will analyze your Facebook in the future. I think the revealing of specific types of content that you share with specific people, as with the link to South Park with your brother, constructed your point well that you want a person's impression of your Facebook to be a very neutral or even unrealistic view of your actual personality. It helps build your credibilty by letting us see a glimpse of who you actually are and comparing it to what we see of your Facebook wall.
From a technical standpoint, I believe the post flows rather well. You give just enough detail on each subject and move on without elaborating far more than necessary. All of your sentences seemed to flow pretty well, there wasn't any unnecessary stopping or run-on sentences that I found. Gramatically, the fact that you are an English major shows and I could only find one minor error. I believe the product is supposed to be written as "iPhone" as opposed to "iphone", at least to my knowledge.
Overall I feel it was very well written and a true, authentic analysis of yourself and your Facebook page.
-Brendan Fahey
