Talk:Paulo Warren

Paulo, overall I think that the work you did on this post was pretty solid. I think that the strongest point of your post is that you choose to reveal a lot about yourself and your interests and that contrasts quite well with your chosen theme of privacy, which you wove in quite evenly throughout your post. I also felt that you did well in comparing yourself in real life to the you that exists online. In terms of improvements, I felt as though your opening was a bit rough and hard to get into; it would really strengthen your post to have a grabbing element in your opening paragraph. Also, the segments that you had may be a bit thick and could use some more division to make them into more easily digestible bits. In terms of visual formatting, I would recommend keeping the titles of your sections flushed to the left, and making sure your images don't make the blocks of texts awkward to read. Finally, while I appreciate your expanding into other social media platforms to better give your reader a feel for the entire scope of your online identity, I felt as though your segments on Reddit and Instagram were maybe a bit lacking in comparison to how in depth you were with your analysis on Facebook; bolstering those two would certainly benefit your post as a whole.

Great post, I look forward to see how you choose to revise what you have. -- Fred Durham