Difference between revisions of "Talk:Paula Luput"
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I have a good idea of what information you found about yourself online, but maybe you could add a few more statements to clearly explain how accurate you felt the information was, or what kind of person someone would think you are based on this information. I would also suggest trying to connect that information with your thesis a little more deeply. Overall, I liked the creative format you used and it portrays an interesting story! | I have a good idea of what information you found about yourself online, but maybe you could add a few more statements to clearly explain how accurate you felt the information was, or what kind of person someone would think you are based on this information. I would also suggest trying to connect that information with your thesis a little more deeply. Overall, I liked the creative format you used and it portrays an interesting story! | ||
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| + | Hi Paula, I really enjoyed reading your entry; I think that the way you set up the story provides an interesting perspective because it pushes the reader to think about the fact that our information could be online forever, accessible to people in the future. I think it would be clearer and strengthen your argument if you provide context at the beginning stating what year it is and maybe giving some commentary on the state of data accessibility/the idea of being able to find out information about individuals. I think also including other data sources or some kind of reference through "MyCelf" that allows you to make comparisons to your online and offline identity. But otherwise, I really enjoyed your unique approach to this assignment! | ||
Revision as of 18:22, 25 February 2021
Comment from Kierra Davis
Hi Paula, The writing style and format you chose was unique and engaging. I think it worked effectively to really describe what sort of information a person would see about you online, and what they might interpret from that information, as just a random viewer. I liked the little details you included for the future year 2055 and MyCelf. This fictional technology was a good way to showcase your thesis of whether it's better to have all of the current information about people on the internet.
I have a good idea of what information you found about yourself online, but maybe you could add a few more statements to clearly explain how accurate you felt the information was, or what kind of person someone would think you are based on this information. I would also suggest trying to connect that information with your thesis a little more deeply. Overall, I liked the creative format you used and it portrays an interesting story!
Comment from Megha Jain
Hi Paula, I really enjoyed reading your entry; I think that the way you set up the story provides an interesting perspective because it pushes the reader to think about the fact that our information could be online forever, accessible to people in the future. I think it would be clearer and strengthen your argument if you provide context at the beginning stating what year it is and maybe giving some commentary on the state of data accessibility/the idea of being able to find out information about individuals. I think also including other data sources or some kind of reference through "MyCelf" that allows you to make comparisons to your online and offline identity. But otherwise, I really enjoyed your unique approach to this assignment!
