Talk:Parth Patel

Hi Parth,

I want to begin by saying that I really enjoyed reading your page. I liked the way you introduced the topic, which you did by explaining how you have been around technology for much of your life as opposed to immediately jumping into discussing the data about yourself that you found. After this, I think you did a good job of explaining the extent of which your personal information is online, and I feel as though I got a good understanding of your data identity from you explained about your data broker searches, along with your Google searches. I also really liked how you discussed your anonymity in different parts to try to find out why there is not much information about yourself online, in addition to the pros and cons of this. I believe the central theme of your page is your overall online anonymity, and I think you do a good job of staying on topic throughout the writing.

Going forward with your revision, I believe it would be beneficial to attempt to introduce some of the readings that we did in class that relate to the points you make throughout your post. These will help strengthen arguments or assumptions that you make. For example, the Shoemaker article on self exposure could be valuable when you discuss your attempts to keep your online anonymity. I also believe relating your discoveries to the topic of ethics would help improve your post. Maybe discuss the ethical dilemmas caused by data brokers while using your analysis as support for the argument? Overall, good job!

-Kyle Gericke