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| + | The formatting of your statement is concise, and the images matching each search you did makes everything look clear. The progression of your investigation is logical, and your formatting helps the reader to follow you through your process. Overall, I think your statement is well-crafted, and my only suggestion would be that you could perhaps break up some of your larger paragraphs to make it even easier to read. | ||
Latest revision as of 17:02, 25 February 2021
Zhen Lian's Review
Hey Oliver! I really enjoyed reading your wiki page. I couldn’t agree with you more, people’s online identity can’t and should not be used as a representation of someone. You gave a detailed analysis of your personal online identity and how it was just what others see from an outside view. I really liked that your body paragraphs had great questions that summarizes the content and brought discussions to the readers. It was great that you gave your own opinions on those issues too. One suggestion I have for “Data Broker: Instant Checkmate” is to elaborate a little bit more on how you felt about the data Instant Checkmate was collecting of you; Them tracking your locations and where you have been to maybe. Another suggestion is “Online Identity Analysis”, I feel like if you made your points into a list rather than numbering it in a paragraph, it would make it more visually appealing and feel structured. Overall, it was clear from your writing that you had a deep understanding of your own online identity statement and how it relates to the real you.
Kayla Wiggins' Review
Hey Oliver. I enjoyed reading your data identity statement. I’ve never gotten a look at data identity from the perspective of someone who plays sports so it was interesting hearing about how public your stats, and therefore part of your identity become. Although I don’t think that someone looking from the outside in would jump to the conclusion that you’ve burned out (we’re often most judgmental towards ourselves). I think your point about Facebook is also poignant. I don’t use it at all anymore so the tagged posts on my page all project the same view of me with friends and family. The only note I would give is to combine your analysis with your conclusion to have a more succinct ending.
Gordon Chan's Review
Hey Oliver, I just had to comment, because I was close to someone with the exact same name as you, who recently graduated from U of M. On a more serious note though, I think you did a very genuine and thorough investigation into your online data identity, and I like how you altered your search terms as well as the search engine to find your identity online.
The formatting of your statement is concise, and the images matching each search you did makes everything look clear. The progression of your investigation is logical, and your formatting helps the reader to follow you through your process. Overall, I think your statement is well-crafted, and my only suggestion would be that you could perhaps break up some of your larger paragraphs to make it even easier to read.
