Talk:Nina Janies

Hi Nina! I loved the angle you took about curating your online image as well as the point you made about this caution still not guaranteeing complete control over your Internet self. I think finding some synonyms of the word “crafted” could be helpful because it felt like you used it a lot, especially in the beginning of the assignment. I thought following the path that your old username led you down was a great idea as well. In my opinion, this behavior emulates what a searcher would do if they were truly trying to find out information about you. Also, though mine isn’t as out-there, I relate on the embarrassing middle school moments and hobbies— free verse poetry anyone? As someone with a more common name, I have truly never felt concerned about curating my Internet presence, and so I thought this observation was really insightful in considering someone else’s perspective and motivations. I enjoyed how you acknowledged that while the search queries did not give you a completely holistic view of who you are, they were essentially “good enough,” especially in a professional capacity. For further suggestions, I think describing the term “bad actors” before you use the term could add some clarity and help you transition between ideas. I love the title and concept of the “Why the Good is Actually Bad” section, but I just felt a little disconnected between the ideas. A small grammar suggestion— the wording “I am still and still will” in your Conclusion felt a bit repetitive. Saying something similar to “I will continue to…” could be helpful. I also think you could strengthen your conclusion by clarifying what you mean by the “real you.” For example, do you mean holding back our non-professional life? Overall, I enjoyed the flow of your essay and your reflections and analysis of how your online self compared to your true self. I look forward to reading your final draft too!