Difference between revisions of "Talk:Nina Janies"

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Emma Muth's Review of Nina Janies's Data Identity Statement

Hi Nina! I loved the angle you took about curating your online image as well as the point you made about this caution still not guaranteeing complete control over your Internet self. I think finding some synonyms of the word “crafted” could be helpful because it felt like you used it a lot, especially in the beginning of the assignment. I thought following the path that your old username led you down was a great idea as well. In my opinion, this behavior emulates what a searcher would do if they were truly trying to find out information about you. Also, though mine isn’t as out-there, I relate on the embarrassing middle school moments and hobbies— free verse poetry anyone? As someone with a more common name, I have truly never felt concerned about curating my Internet presence, and so I thought this observation was really insightful in considering someone else’s perspective and motivations. I enjoyed how you acknowledged that while the search queries did not give you a completely holistic view of who you are, they were essentially “good enough,” especially in a professional capacity. For further suggestions, I think describing the term “bad actors” before you use the term could add some clarity and help you transition between ideas. I love the title and concept of the “Why the Good is Actually Bad” section, but I just felt a little disconnected between the ideas. A small grammar suggestion— the wording “I am still and still will” in your Conclusion felt a bit repetitive. Saying something similar to “I will continue to…” could be helpful. I also think you could strengthen your conclusion by clarifying what you mean by the “real you.” For example, do you mean holding back our non-professional life? Overall, I enjoyed the flow of your essay and your reflections and analysis of how your online self compared to your true self. I look forward to reading your final draft too!

Emily Choe's comment

Hi Nina! This was really well done. I really enjoyed the way you opened your article with a personal anecdote that I think a lot of people can relate to— I remember being a kid and always being lectured on the permanence of the internet. You tied this in really well throughout your page, referencing some blog posts from your younger days that you find embarrassing now. I thought it was really interesting how you addressed both sides; most of this information is harmless, and embarrassing at most, but there’s always the opportunity for greater consequences, like doxxing or identity theft. Stylistically, your use of capitalization of ’the Bad’ and ‘the Good’ got a little distracting, maybe you could change it to be in italics or in quotes, but this is minor and just personal preference. I think you bring up some really interesting points at the end when you discuss the possible implications of sharing your information online. An interesting point that came to mind for me that I’d love to hear you expand on is how optional this is; it’s not really your choice to have a LinkedIn if you’re applying to jobs. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this, great job!