Talk:Natalie Lampa

Natalie,

I really like your focus on the lack of information on your online identity and what you did to ensure you achieve that to show that you actually did everything you can to find yourself. In addition, I applaud the extra effort you went through by paying data brokers for your information and am shocked that even then you weren’t able to find much about yourself. However, you might want to check your photos because they are not uploaded online yet as a result the personal evidence is not as genuine as it could be (perhaps you could add photos of the sex offender chart and the result you got from the data broker?). You also might want to relate back to class materials such as assigned or optional readings. In terms of writing style, it is clear and concise with no noticeable typos except for the first sentence “a person that I’ve volunteered at” where it’s hard to discern what you are actually trying to say. Other than that just make sure the mediaWiki’s capability is being fully utilized by making sure your pictures are actually uploaded online.