Talk:Matthew Wolfgram

This is a really unique piece due to the nature of the online identity you have. Being different from most other entries made it quite enjoyable to see how you would be able to express your online identity. I also enjoyed the well timed references which helped make the piece an even easier read. I do, however, have a few suggestions. First, I believe it would be beneficial for you to take a bit more time explaining the idea of how what we consume online shapes who we are. You introduced this idea in the first paragraph but did next to nothing with it for the entirety of the Facebook section and most of the Twitter section. Expanding on this idea could help back the claims made in the first section even more. Additionally, I was left wanting to know more about your online identity by the end of the entry. I know there's not much about yourself but at least give your online persona a bit of personality in addition to just being an observer. A few other suggestions I have include naming your sections better as they are very bland and generic at the moment, using wiki syntax to create a proper references section (see the "Help" tab at the top of the edit box), and try moving a photo to the top and making it larger to better draw in the reader with a more visual first impression. Overall this was a really interesting piece that will only become greater with some revision.

-- Luke Justice