Talk:Madi Marie

Madison,

Your page is well-written, and both the text and included images give comprehensive coverage to what one would find looking through your profile.

While is not lacking in content, I think a more chronological structure would have made this a more comfortable read. You talk about early or "immature" content in History, but this same content leaks into most of your other headings and probably would have worked better as headings for Early History and Recent History. As it is, your section on Photos is somewhat confusing as your Michigan photos (obviously more recent than highschool) show up first before you revert to talking about content from 2010.

Also relevant to readability is the image formatting, which is a pain in the ass when you're using a new platform like MediaWiki but can be important to readers if done incorrectly. Your images are centered and do not allow text to run parallel to them, which has the effect of making the reader scroll quite a bit. It also tampers with the sequencing of the text, because the images visually separate paragraphs rather than tying in with them.

With respect to your analysis, I like that you mention how your sorority overrepresents you on your profile, but I was disappointed that the aspects that are underrepresented don't seem to be mentioned. Similarly, you allude to having matured on Facebook, but a majority of your article still talks about your earlier usage, so your more mature projections on Facebook are themselves underrepresented in your article.

Overall I feel like the vast majority of the writing can be left untouched, but the paragraphs feel out of order and the image formatting exacerbates the problem. This is a strong article when read a few times over, but optimizing the structure could give the same impression to a reader the first time around as well.

- Kevin