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I thought that your blunt explanation of your online purpose was very useful for readers. It allowed me to follow your journey on social media, keeping your goal in mind. I enjoyed seeing how these goals played out on different social media sites. To improve your piece, I would pick two social media platforms to discuss your presence on. Currently, through your comparison of your presence on 3 separate social media platforms, it feels as though you are just stating what you do. I believe if you honed your focus to 2 of those platforms you could dive in deeper as to why you act differently on each. You could also incorporate class readings as to how your actions are similar and different to social media norms. -- Cami Johnson | I thought that your blunt explanation of your online purpose was very useful for readers. It allowed me to follow your journey on social media, keeping your goal in mind. I enjoyed seeing how these goals played out on different social media sites. To improve your piece, I would pick two social media platforms to discuss your presence on. Currently, through your comparison of your presence on 3 separate social media platforms, it feels as though you are just stating what you do. I believe if you honed your focus to 2 of those platforms you could dive in deeper as to why you act differently on each. You could also incorporate class readings as to how your actions are similar and different to social media norms. -- Cami Johnson | ||
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Revision as of 19:45, 20 February 2018
I found your online identity statement to be very engaging. I felt that you artfully walked your readers through your different personas on social media. From the beginning of finding your guiding path of your astrological sign to be enchanting. I would recommend including an outside source for why using your sign as a guiding force is powerful for many other social media users. Maybe how the idea came to you/when you became initially interested in astrology and alternative spirituality and how that has continued to guide you throughout your social media journey.
I thought that your blunt explanation of your online purpose was very useful for readers. It allowed me to follow your journey on social media, keeping your goal in mind. I enjoyed seeing how these goals played out on different social media sites. To improve your piece, I would pick two social media platforms to discuss your presence on. Currently, through your comparison of your presence on 3 separate social media platforms, it feels as though you are just stating what you do. I believe if you honed your focus to 2 of those platforms you could dive in deeper as to why you act differently on each. You could also incorporate class readings as to how your actions are similar and different to social media norms. -- Cami Johnson
I like your page and will make more substantive edits tonight -- Jason
