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Although your writing style had a pretty nice flow, I wish you labeled certain sections so it would have been clearer to readers what aspect of Facebook you were discussing. Also along those lines, by labeling sections, you could have gone a bit more in depth about certain sections of Facebook such as the “About Me” section or “Tagged Photographs.” I don’t think that it was necessarily needed but it could have allowed your analysis to be a bit more specific. | Although your writing style had a pretty nice flow, I wish you labeled certain sections so it would have been clearer to readers what aspect of Facebook you were discussing. Also along those lines, by labeling sections, you could have gone a bit more in depth about certain sections of Facebook such as the “About Me” section or “Tagged Photographs.” I don’t think that it was necessarily needed but it could have allowed your analysis to be a bit more specific. | ||
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| + | A solid avatar post, not excruciating to read. Bonus points for the cute cat in your main picture. The “seriousness of purpose” part was definitely there, and you went into fairly thorough detail about the aspects of your selected identity (referencing one of the readings from class, well done). The concept of elements you don't control saying more about you than the ones you do was a good choice in relating your avatar to a deeper social concept about human behavior. Super A+, bro-guy. | ||
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| + | Your writing style was clear and concise and I didn't find any grammatical errors. This is commendable, especially in a class so closely related to EECS. The point about making your profile picture reflect your lifestyle by selecting only pictures of moments that clearly communicate it was cool. Your sense of humor definitely showed through in your selected elements (awkward family photos, nice) and I feel like the reader got an honest sense of who you are via these selected elements. Nicely done and congratulations on never having to do this project again! | ||
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Latest revision as of 19:43, 21 November 2012
I thought your whole article was very thorough and I was able to get a lot of information out of it about who your avatar is. Your introduction paragraph was very good and I liked that it set up the rest of the discussion. I liked how you talked about the photo captions and how they also reveal parts of your identity because they are personal and only your friends would really understand. This is a great thing to talk about because so many people are Facebook friends with people they hardly know, and these people might take something the wrong way online because they only see the bits and pieces of your identity that you choose to share. I think you brought up some great points about using Facebook to connect with your real friends and so many parts of your identity are not detectable because these people already know you well enough.
Some Suggestions: Although your writing style had a pretty nice flow, I wish you labeled certain sections so it would have been clearer to readers what aspect of Facebook you were discussing. Also along those lines, by labeling sections, you could have gone a bit more in depth about certain sections of Facebook such as the “About Me” section or “Tagged Photographs.” I don’t think that it was necessarily needed but it could have allowed your analysis to be a bit more specific. –Alissa
Lindsey, A solid avatar post, not excruciating to read. Bonus points for the cute cat in your main picture. The “seriousness of purpose” part was definitely there, and you went into fairly thorough detail about the aspects of your selected identity (referencing one of the readings from class, well done). The concept of elements you don't control saying more about you than the ones you do was a good choice in relating your avatar to a deeper social concept about human behavior. Super A+, bro-guy.
Your writing style was clear and concise and I didn't find any grammatical errors. This is commendable, especially in a class so closely related to EECS. The point about making your profile picture reflect your lifestyle by selecting only pictures of moments that clearly communicate it was cool. Your sense of humor definitely showed through in your selected elements (awkward family photos, nice) and I feel like the reader got an honest sense of who you are via these selected elements. Nicely done and congratulations on never having to do this project again! -Mitch
