Talk:Lexi Leftakes
Comment #1: (Tiffany Luong)
Hi Lexi!
Great post overall! I really enjoyed reading your autobiography and how you incorporated the physical photo album your mom uses to store photos of you vs. your online album where you store pictures. That is very interesting to play off of and makes me think what we as a culture now value in terms of where we store collect and look back on our memories.
I thought it was quite funny where you said that it’s been three months since your London trip and your physical photo album you bought is sitting in your room collecting dust. That is honestly true with me too, I have bought physical photo albums hoping to use them but never did. Your first draft is great; I can tell you spent a lot of time putting together your autobiography and the quality is great. I would like to see more of your personality and thoughts incorporated into your autobiography though. You state in “My Story” that you choose the best picture to represent each event or activity. Why though? Why do you take the time to choose only the best pictures? Are you afraid that people will judge you if you put up “ugly” pictures instead? Why do you choose to only show the world part of your story and not all? I would have liked to read up on your reasons why you make certain choices on Facebook.
In the “Temporality” section, I like how you brought up the question “If I delete all of that from my Facebook, is my profile authentic then?”. Instead of just asking that question and leaving it in midair for the reader to decide, state your viewpoint instead on this question. You only need one or two sentences after.
I definitely agree with you in regards to Facebook and how everyone is always editing and making themselves look good online that you don’t really know who they are until you meet them in real life. Great last two sentences in the conclusion. As stated before, you just have minor edits to fix. Overall, great job and I am looking forward to your final draft!
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