Difference between revisions of "Talk:Lexi Leftakes"

Latest revision as of 20:08, 5 April 2016

Comment #1: (Tiffany Luong)

Hi Lexi!

Great post overall! I really enjoyed reading your autobiography and how you incorporated the physical photo album your mom uses to store photos of you vs. your online album where you store pictures. That is very interesting to play off of and makes me think what we as a culture now value in terms of where we store collect and look back on our memories.

I thought it was quite funny where you said that it’s been three months since your London trip and your physical photo album you bought is sitting in your room collecting dust. That is honestly true with me too, I have bought physical photo albums hoping to use them but never did. Your first draft is great; I can tell you spent a lot of time putting together your autobiography and the quality is great. I would like to see more of your personality and thoughts incorporated into your autobiography though. You state in “My Story” that you choose the best picture to represent each event or activity. Why though? Why do you take the time to choose only the best pictures? Are you afraid that people will judge you if you put up “ugly” pictures instead? Why do you choose to only show the world part of your story and not all? I would have liked to read up on your reasons why you make certain choices on Facebook.

In the “Temporality” section, I like how you brought up the question “If I delete all of that from my Facebook, is my profile authentic then?”. Instead of just asking that question and leaving it in midair for the reader to decide, state your viewpoint instead on this question. You only need one or two sentences after.

I definitely agree with you in regards to Facebook and how everyone is always editing and making themselves look good online that you don’t really know who they are until you meet them in real life. Great last two sentences in the conclusion. As stated before, you just have minor edits to fix. Overall, great job and I am looking forward to your final draft!

Comment #2: (Madeline Jursek)

Really great post, Lexi! I really enjoyed reading it and getting a better sense of your Facebook identity. A lot of the things you wrote about I can easily relate to, making it easy to read. Your writing flowed together really well and it was nicely organized. Also, I didn't see any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. Good work!

You raised a really interesting point about temporality on Facebook- what is authenticity on Facebook? I think it would be really cool if you dived deeper into this issue and make a strong stance on the issue of authenticity. By deleting old, embarrassing posts, are you making your online identity less authentic? Or, on the other hand, are you making yourself more authentic by portraying only the new 2016 version of Lexi? As you mention, your 2009 Facebook identity is completely different from who you are now. I think you should try to pick one argument and explain in-depth why you feel that way.

In the audience section, you ask the question "How is audience interaction incorporated into the self-presentation?". This is a great question! One of the cool/challenging things about Facebook is that we have so many different audiences on it. I have high school friends, college friends, people I would categorize as acquaintances more than friends, my family members, coworkers, etc. The list goes on and on. It would be interested if you expanded on this point, maybe giving specific examples of how these diverse audiences directly affect your self-presentation. You could also try to tie the concept of authenticity back in here.... Are you less authentic if you post simply to change how you're perceived by one of these audiences? These are just some interesting things to consider.

Overall, great work! I really enjoyed your Facebook avatar and I felt like it was very personal.

Comment #3: (Drew Dyer)

Definitely an interesting hook to start things off. It shows the contrast of our generation to those before us and I think it highlights how very similar we are. I don't know the last time my parents went through one of their old photo albums, I know they have them, and I'm sure if they went through them they'd love it, but they don't do it often. Facebook allows us to store and share these memories all of the time but it sounds like you're using it more as a storage device than a sharing platform. You mentioned the 60/40 split, I'm curious, personally, how many friends ever look at those pictures again. (I mean this for your pictures and mine)

I think you made a good argument for understanding how your Facebook identity aligns with who you are as a person, but I'm not sure its as developed as it could be. You mention that you put nearly all of your pictures from an event in an album online but then said that many of your friends only show the 'highlights' of their trips, therefore you don't get to know them as well. However, you mention that you don't do the highlights, you do everything. I think you could dive into that a little more about how even though you post a lot of photos, it's still not the best representation of the real you.

It flowed well, it was well written and I enjoyed your use of graphics to illustrate your ideas. Ideas were developed and it wasn't too broad, I just think you have the ability to back up your own argument using yourself as a counterexample and doing so could strengthen your post overall.