Talk:Kirk Turrentine

Mutaman Alnaseri's Comment

Hello there Kirk,

I think that what you've spoken about rings true for many. Companies nowadays crown machine learning as king and don't mind extrapolating data to make a bigger profile of you. You're analysis of how Google misrepresents your identity was well written and shows a lot. In particular, tying in how your activities on social media and your personal websites can affect the interpretation of your online identity really highlights how the internet can overexpose one aspect of you while ignoring other important parts of your life.

Thesis aside, I wanted to point out a few things about your style of writing. For the most part, I thought it was pretty good. However, I noticed a few typos here and there alongside some grammatical mistakes. These issues were infrequent but I'd suggest having someone look your writing over to point out the mistakes. Additionally, I felt that "The Accuracy" and "The Question of Ownership" don't fit together very well. The first one talks about how companies should accurately represent data identities while the second one talks about how people should be able to keep data to themselves. Although the main ideas of these two sections work well together, the way you wrote them doesn't mesh as well as it could. I would recommend revising "The Question of Ownership" to talk about the tradeoffs of having control of your own data vs being misrepresented online.