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Hey Kevin, I thought I really enjoyed reading what your findings were and especially what your feelings were in regards to this assignment. I think your biggest strength in this article is definitely your connections to the readings. You intertwine them consistently with your findings and each time they are very relevant and well elaborated. Many articles will connect just in the begging or end of their article and use the middle as filling and as a platform to discuss their findings, you however are mentioning topics from the reading consistently throughout your article. Well done! | Hey Kevin, I thought I really enjoyed reading what your findings were and especially what your feelings were in regards to this assignment. I think your biggest strength in this article is definitely your connections to the readings. You intertwine them consistently with your findings and each time they are very relevant and well elaborated. Many articles will connect just in the begging or end of their article and use the middle as filling and as a platform to discuss their findings, you however are mentioning topics from the reading consistently throughout your article. Well done! | ||
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Comment: Roy Okerstrom
Hey Kevin, I thought I really enjoyed reading what your findings were and especially what your feelings were in regards to this assignment. I think your biggest strength in this article is definitely your connections to the readings. You intertwine them consistently with your findings and each time they are very relevant and well elaborated. Many articles will connect just in the begging or end of their article and use the middle as filling and as a platform to discuss their findings, you however are mentioning topics from the reading consistently throughout your article. Well done!
I think there are a few things in here that you could change which would definitely benefit your article. Firstly, I found your introduction (first two paragraphs) to be a bit lengthy. I thought the content in them was good, but I would try also adding a bit more about the assignment itself as opposed to lots of synopsis of some of our readings. Secondly, I also think that your article could benefit from a little bit of structure. One functionality that you can use on Wiki is to make small header sections, that will outline what you will be talking about below. I think that this would really help organize your article and make it easier to read for your readers. If you don't know what I mean, check out my Data Identity assignment as I implemented some of the headers there.
Good Job!
