Talk:Joseph Tingle

Brady Hicks

Your article does a good job of staying on the topic of you being concerned about what information is out there for anyone to see. One thing to work on is that in the beginning, you say there was a lot of public information online about you and that it concerned you, and you stick with that through most of the article. Then at the end you say you weren't surprised at what all was out there which seems like a contradiction. I think your article would benefit from talking about what comes up with a Google Images search and including some of those images in your article. Another thing would be to consider comparing your online presence to the real you. Your "Thoughts on Identity Results Online" section could benefit from an analysis of how true the information is that is out there. There were also many grammar errors that made it hard to read and distracted from the flow of the article.