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| + | Hi Joanna, | ||
| + | I really enjoyed reading your avatar autobiography. Your arguments were clear and thoughtful. You also chose an interesting approach to the assignment by including an introduction and a conclusion. It organized your thoughts very well. I especially liked how personal you made it. The part about your cousin was a great example and supported your arguments. | ||
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| + | From first glance I noticed your lack of images. I understand you are not an avid Facebook user but I think it would be beneficial to include a picture of your Facebook profile and potentially your profile picture. I think it will give readers a deeper understanding and a better visual. If for whatever reason you may not feel comfortable posting these pictures perhaps explain why and find another graphic to use just to make a little more visually pleasing. | ||
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| + | It might be interesting to explore why you have chosen not to deactivate your Facebook account after all these years. You clearly see plenty of problems with Facebook and acknowledge the artificial relationships it creates. So why have you chosen to stay? What is keeping you? Are there societal pressures to have a Facebook account even if you don't agree with the principles and barely use it? I think this could supplement your ideas very nicely. | ||
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| + | Great job! | ||
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| + | - Avery | ||
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Revision as of 18:27, 1 April 2016
Comment #1: Hi Joanna,
I really enjoyed reading your avatar autobiography. Your arguments were clear and thoughtful. You also chose an interesting approach to the assignment by including an introduction and a conclusion. It organized your thoughts very well. I especially liked how personal you made it. The part about your cousin was a great example and supported your arguments.
From first glance I noticed your lack of images. I understand you are not an avid Facebook user but I think it would be beneficial to include a picture of your Facebook profile and potentially your profile picture. I think it will give readers a deeper understanding and a better visual. If for whatever reason you may not feel comfortable posting these pictures perhaps explain why and find another graphic to use just to make a little more visually pleasing.
It might be interesting to explore why you have chosen not to deactivate your Facebook account after all these years. You clearly see plenty of problems with Facebook and acknowledge the artificial relationships it creates. So why have you chosen to stay? What is keeping you? Are there societal pressures to have a Facebook account even if you don't agree with the principles and barely use it? I think this could supplement your ideas very nicely.
Great job!
- Avery
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