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I really enjoyed reading your page! I thought your discussion and analysis on your using a different name in high school had on your online identity. I also think you do well with analyzing what was/wasn't public online about you, even though you did not have a lot of information to work with. For your final revision, I think something that could help to build your narrative is by introducing yourself and possibly your relationship to your digital identity. You start off with talking about your LinkedIn, and while I think that is important and informative, I still do not know enough about you to put that information in context. Overall, I think you did a really great job! | I really enjoyed reading your page! I thought your discussion and analysis on your using a different name in high school had on your online identity. I also think you do well with analyzing what was/wasn't public online about you, even though you did not have a lot of information to work with. For your final revision, I think something that could help to build your narrative is by introducing yourself and possibly your relationship to your digital identity. You start off with talking about your LinkedIn, and while I think that is important and informative, I still do not know enough about you to put that information in context. Overall, I think you did a really great job! | ||
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| + | First, I liked your use of the 404 error on your page as an image for your digital footprint. I also really enjoyed your third paragraph on changing identity. I thought it was very insightful, and gives a different perspective to many of us. One quick recommendation I would make is adding a small introduction above your table of contents. Your very first sentence feels like a bit of a run-on sentence, maybe break up into two sentences? Also in your second sentence I would consider "employers have a higher chance of finding me” instead of “employer has”. In your second paragraph maybe switch the different identity versions to "none of them are me" instead of "is me". I think you maybe meant to use a comma instead of a period in your third paragraph, first and second sentence. Lastly, as a personal safety recommendation, I would remove your residential address and phone number from your profile or resume. If an employer is interested in your profile, they can email you or message you on LinkedIn. Great job overall! | ||
Revision as of 00:13, 27 February 2020
Hi Jinghan, I really enjoyed reading your page! I thought your discussion and analysis on your using a different name in high school had on your online identity. I also think you do well with analyzing what was/wasn't public online about you, even though you did not have a lot of information to work with. For your final revision, I think something that could help to build your narrative is by introducing yourself and possibly your relationship to your digital identity. You start off with talking about your LinkedIn, and while I think that is important and informative, I still do not know enough about you to put that information in context. Overall, I think you did a really great job! -Rachel
Hi Jinghan!
First, I liked your use of the 404 error on your page as an image for your digital footprint. I also really enjoyed your third paragraph on changing identity. I thought it was very insightful, and gives a different perspective to many of us. One quick recommendation I would make is adding a small introduction above your table of contents. Your very first sentence feels like a bit of a run-on sentence, maybe break up into two sentences? Also in your second sentence I would consider "employers have a higher chance of finding me” instead of “employer has”. In your second paragraph maybe switch the different identity versions to "none of them are me" instead of "is me". I think you maybe meant to use a comma instead of a period in your third paragraph, first and second sentence. Lastly, as a personal safety recommendation, I would remove your residential address and phone number from your profile or resume. If an employer is interested in your profile, they can email you or message you on LinkedIn. Great job overall!
