Talk:Jessica Carlin

I liked how you started the article with your initial thoughts about online privacy and then discussed the morphed perception of those initial privacy thoughts into something that changed your methodical thinking about privacy in the online environment. It was really interesting to hear that your pre research process began with legal paper documents that were signed in regards to owning property rather than the method of Google searching of your name. This was really interesting. I think the biggest piece of revision I could give you would be to apply one of the philosophical ideas talked about in one of the class readings to the body of your argument pertaining to the concealing of data versus the revealing of data. By adding this to the forth paragraph, it may indicate some natural breaks in this section of the piece which would help with the flow of the work. It would be awesome if you chose to add headers to each section too. I thought is was really interesting that you brought up the idea of putting trust into social media privacy settings just because we trust the terms and conditions are written for our best interest in the online environment. That fact that you actually went through and decided to read something that a majority of people choose to check the box and move on made the audience feel like this investigation of your online identity made you go back and question your beliefs about social environments to upholding privacy for our personal data. This is something that social media sites often claim to do but, after much consideration, lack in actions steps to back up. Well done.