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| − | I | + | The hook is great, and immediately drew me in. I like the comparisons you make to compare LinkedIn to other social networks. In the section about endorsements, I think you could explore more what it means for that to change over time and maybe not reflect the whole story. Especially since you end the previous section talking about how authentic LinkedIn is to you, it seems contradictory to then say that it is not authentic. Also, this made me wonder if you can remove what people endorse you for, and if you can, why you chose not to remove strengths that you don’t see as strengths for yourself? This also applies to your interests – why do you not clean those up? Is it a product of being passive or because they are aspirations you one day think will be true? I do think the end ties it all together well by explaining how your multiple identities are represented by these “interests” and “endorsements,” which on the network of LinkedIn, stand for more than what they are at face value. |
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"Overall, I really enjoyed your post about your social media experience with LinkedIn. Your story of your journey with LinkedIn followed the prompt – it dealt with the intricacies of you using the site and was not completely about you as a person. I think your piece would benefit on adding some information about how you’ve used the platform over time. Have your uses of it changed over the years, less from bragging and more towards blogging/journalism (or other possible uses of the website)? Also, I think you should speak less about the features that LinkedIn offers its users unless they directly deal with your interaction with the platform. However, in speaking about the features that LinkedIn offers, you bring up the interesting point of misrepresentation – a discrepancy between your online and offline identity – and the commonality of bragging. I think those are interesting topics, and it could be interesting to further craft your piece around what you do on the site and then tie it back even more to those themes. Why do you use LinkedIn if it facilitates bragging and a distorted version of who you are, your interests, and goals? And why aren’t you concerned with the false perception of who you are? Why don’t you change it from the views of your high school self?"
-- Chalse Okorom
The hook is great, and immediately drew me in. I like the comparisons you make to compare LinkedIn to other social networks. In the section about endorsements, I think you could explore more what it means for that to change over time and maybe not reflect the whole story. Especially since you end the previous section talking about how authentic LinkedIn is to you, it seems contradictory to then say that it is not authentic. Also, this made me wonder if you can remove what people endorse you for, and if you can, why you chose not to remove strengths that you don’t see as strengths for yourself? This also applies to your interests – why do you not clean those up? Is it a product of being passive or because they are aspirations you one day think will be true? I do think the end ties it all together well by explaining how your multiple identities are represented by these “interests” and “endorsements,” which on the network of LinkedIn, stand for more than what they are at face value.
-Amelia Cacchione
