Talk:Hayden Macfarlane

Comment from Hailey Harris

Hi Hayden! The tone of your article made it very interesting to read, and I think your case is fairly unique because there are few people left who have managed to stay so “off the grid” like you have. I do have a few suggestions. The first is that I think your article could benefit from a real introduction. You jumped into content very fast with your first paragraph and in my opinion, that would make a better conclusion. Your introduction could focus on your life and how much of an emphasis you put on not sharing personal information online, therefore you expected to not find a lot about yourself. Then, the conclusion could discuss how data brokers didn’t find anything on you, and an overall reflection about your online profile. By adding a complete introduction and conclusion, it’ll be a smoother read and make it even more enjoyable. Overall, great job!