Difference between revisions of "Talk:Erica Silverman"

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I really enjoyed reading this entry. You set up the sections of this entry in a way that made it really easy to read and follow the journey of yourself through social media. Separating your uses of both Facebook and Instagram into past and present uses of the technology was a very interesting and valuable way to organize your ideas. You also did a good job of mentioning your transition between the two social media platforms. Something you could elaborate on is the fear you have about the privacy of your accounts. You mentioned that you don't want people to be able to know everything about you but you could also talk about if you feel the need to have control over your own information/identity. You also might want to fix some of the photo layouts so that they are clustered together more rather than on both sides of the page; it just made it a little difficult to follow the text at some points. Overall this is a really good piece and I think you do a good job of discussing your identity as shown through your online profiles. -- Megan Lakkides

Hey Erica! I would like to say that I really enjoyed reading through this. I think it was structured in a way that made it a very easy read. The chronological progression through your different platforms really helped me follow the reading. I did see however that you talk about your online privacy briefly in the start but you stray from the topic when describing your social media privacy. I think that you could add measures that you've taken to keep your Facebook profile only accessible to people you know kind of like you talked about in the section about your Instagram. You could also expand more on why you take such precautions when it comes to protecting your privacy. I think it would really add to your article and allow your readers to understand more of where you are coming from. Some slight aesthetic changes could include fixing the structure of your pictures a little more, I think the text in between the two pictures was a little distracting and it takes away from the article, I think you could narrow it down to which pictures provide the most value to the article and wrap the text around those in a way in which the text can flow without being interrupted. I do think this is a great start and was a very enjoyable read! - Saul Bravo

I think this is a very well written piece. As far as the requirements from the rubric go, I think you hit most of them. The first thing I noticed was that you really made an effort to use the wiki formatting styles. The table of contents and the way that your pictures were presented made the piece feel like any other legitimate wiki article you would read online. Additionally, the format allowed the piece to be very organized and have a good flow as you presented the way your interactions with social media evolved over time. One thing that stood out to me was how well you incorporated the Floridi article we discussed in class into your piece. You did a good job of tying that article into the overall theme of privacy in your wiki. One thing I could suggest that you could improve is maybe adding some sort of a hook sentence to draw your reader in. Otherwise I think your article is very strong and you do a good job sticking to the requirements of the rubric while going above and beyond with the formatting and inclusion of class material.

- Brian Liggio