Talk:Elizabeth Stehney

Elizabeth, I really liked your statement. I think you did a nice job of setting the stage for what was to come by introducing some questions at the beginning. I also like how you used headings to separate your different paragraphs. I think it’s a really interesting point you make in stating that you expected your more recent social media accounts to show up first on google. I feel like that’s what I would expect as well so I’m surprised to see that that wasn’t the case for you. I like the angle you took in telling whether things were true or not about what you found (like when you say you’ve never watched soccer, but somehow “liked” it on Facebook). One suggestion I would make is just to add a little bit more of a thesis type sentence in your first paragraph just to set up a clear frame for what you’re discussing, but I think what you have now is still effective in addition to that. I think you used the readings nicely to help your points. Overall I think you did a great job telling your experience! -Rachel Becker (rmbecker)