Talk:Dylan Henderson

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Dylan,

I recognize and appreciate the honest of this article. I think it's likely that many of the more humorous writings for this assignment are an attempt to deflect or minimize the same insecurities that you tackled head-on, so for that I have a great appreciation.

Aside from a few technical issues (capitalizing Clickhole and The Onion, "ok" versus "okay," you *would be cyber-kidnapped, etc.) this is a pretty easy and comfortable read. However, at a few points I felt the structure drifted a bit. For instance, the heading Facebook, a History is crammed into one paragraph, the end of which (beginning with "In retrospect") probably belongs under a heading dedicated specifically to analysis rather than history.

Under Photos you use the phrase "few and far between" twice, yet what I was most curious about was the timestamp on the photos of you with your friends. It makes sense you would have pictures showing interesting moments of your life, but could someone determine you aren't spending "all of your time" doing them by seeing the frequency at which these images are posted?

Taking the article as a whole, you spend a pretty good chunk of time talking about your online persona as well as the image you try to portray, but it would have been nice to see at least one example of something you did remove or decide not to include on your profile. Moreover, I like the completeness of your self-analysis, but what I'm also curious to see is what kind of interactions you want and expect from other people. Again, you discuss the kind of content that's found on your profile and what you want people to think, but not much is said about the typical responses people have to your content.

- Kevin