Talk:Drew Dyer
Hey Drew,
I really enjoyed reading your piece! I completely agree with how you laid out your wiki site, separating parts of your story through different phases you went through. I know for sure that my Facebook Avatar has changed a lot throughout the years. The phases that your Facebook Avatar went through were very similar to mine. Both of our profiles started off very open but became more selective when going through college and high school. Unfortunately, I am not 21 yet, so hopefully, my Facebook Avatar goes through the casual phase soon. In addition, it was nice that you compared your avatar from Facebook with MySpace through its customizability and how you would express yourself through that.
There were only a few things that I would fix after re-reading your piece. I feel that some of the primary and secondary elements titles could be more descriptive. Maybe you could make the individual titles under the headers more representative of the text written below it.
Best, William Juang
Hey Drew,
Reading your Facebook avatar was very interesting Drew! First off, I want to point out the excellent organization you have throughout, with the separate heading distinguishing the separate phases of your “Facebook life,” if you will. It makes for an easy understanding of the separate phases, while providing a sense of direction for the entire overview of your avatar.
The resume phase seems to be a very common phase for college students (myself included). Being conscious of what is posted one’s social media profile is a great trait to have, as many people just rounding the legal drinking age seem to forget this. I also think it is interesting that you mentioned you have become more lenient on Facebook since become of legal drinking age, because I have found myself in the same situation as well.
I also like your connections with primary and secondary elements in each individual phase. The main portions of your Facebook page are contained in the primary elements along with activity, and the secondary portions are the analysis of that activity. This is a great way to lay out your avatar, as it makes it very appealing to the reader. As a general trend, it seems that many people were very active on Facebook in their early years of being a member, but slowly diminished as time elapsed. I find it quite interesting that even though we become more relaxed on the material that shows up on news feeds and photos that are tagged, we become less engaged in the Facebook community as a whole.
It seems you have a very accurate and straightforward portrayal of yourself on Facebook. Sharing events about your life is something you don’t do often, but others tag you in things all the time. Keeping things private seems to be a main concern, especially during the resume phase, but it seems you have done an excellent job at keeping your profile professional.
The overall logical flow of this avatar is great, and the errors are few and far between. If one thing could be changed, I would say adding a couple more pictures to give the reader a bit more information about yourself. Giving more background information would have been beneficial for the reader, but then again, privacy is a key theme and element you convey to the reader by continuously showing you are aware of material on your Facebook page. You did a great job and I really enjoyed learning about your avatar.
Best, - Blake Schewe
