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| + | I really liked your piece and the direction it went! I thought using both languages and switching from google to bing while also doing the search was a great idea. I also really liked how had a friend look over the information as well because I feel like sometimes knowing that we have a profile out there we can forget all the information that it has. I also thought your graphics tied in nicely and that everything was formatting really well. | ||
| + | Overall, I think you could make your data identity statement a little bit stronger by tieing in the idea of information fiction earlier. At the end it almost feels like something you need to add and almost doesn't feel natural. Besides tying more in on floridi I think your statement was very well written and I really enjoyed it. | ||
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Latest revision as of 03:45, 18 February 2019
I read someone else’s statement that connected some of the readings from class in their introduction and I think doing something similar in your intro could provide a strong setup for the rest of your statement! I liked that you didn’t just search Google but also searched other browsers like Bing. Also, you could make an ethical argument about the fact that the internet remembers more about you than you remember about yourself. It could be a good topic to further incorporate the ethical concepts we’ve been discussing in class. I do like that you point out how your online persona doesn’t quite match how you feel you are offline. Your “Takeaways” section is great at doing this! (also your personal website is amazing!!) Overall, I would look through your entire statement just to fix some sentence structures and grammatical errors, but your data identity statement has a really nice flow to it and wrapped things up nicely at the end.
Commenter: Ashley Carroll (ashleyac)
I really liked your piece and the direction it went! I thought using both languages and switching from google to bing while also doing the search was a great idea. I also really liked how had a friend look over the information as well because I feel like sometimes knowing that we have a profile out there we can forget all the information that it has. I also thought your graphics tied in nicely and that everything was formatting really well.
Overall, I think you could make your data identity statement a little bit stronger by tieing in the idea of information fiction earlier. At the end it almost feels like something you need to add and almost doesn't feel natural. Besides tying more in on floridi I think your statement was very well written and I really enjoyed it.
Commenter: Elizabeth Stehney (estehney)
